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When visions came up my mind
And passion took over my heart
I have decided what I wanted
To live with dreams that I have

Being free from oneself
Opening the eyes of my heart
Not skipping any moment
Seeing things once in my sight

Falling in love
Singing above
Flying like a dove
Living a meaningful life
Dreaming is living. Living is dreaming. They say what differentiates humans from animals is having dreams.
When I have decided what I wanted to be in the future, I feel like no one can ever stop me from achieving what I wanted.
I feel like a person with worth. :D (Big Grin) 
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That1PersonUForgot Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Featured here --->

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Have a wonderful day! :heart:  I am a dummy! 
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SLant22 Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2014  Student General Artist
Thank you :) 
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That1PersonUForgot Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome :D
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CelestialMemories Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hi! :iconexcitedhiplz: 

I am here on behalf of #Criticarium to provide a review of your lovely poem! The following review is my personal opinion and view of the poem and any advice provide is strictly up to you to interpret how you wish. I do not wish to insult or criticize your poem in any way, I find it rather sweet and heartwarming. 

Overall Thought 
This is obviously a meaningful piece that I feel conveys a message that when you finally release yourself and finally find what you truly want to do or be then you are free and you can do anything. This poem clearly states that message and it is a message that is uplifting and anyone can relate to and enjoy. 

Lines 1-4

You clearly stated the purpose of the piece in this stanza and it was a very concise and clear thought. One of the things I did notice about your piece was the lack of punctuation. Normally poetry is not read from line to line, but read by the punctuation marks. Adding punctuation marks help understand how the poem should be read (while I am assuming that you wanted a pause at every line but for just a warning not a lot of people do this and instead read it like a run-on sentence). 

Lines 5-8

While the first stanza stated the topic, this stanza elaborated on your thought, but the connection feels much more abstract. This is where I believe punctuation might be more beneficial. I read over this section a couple of times. I was particularly stuck on the last line: "Seeing things once in my sight". I interpreted it as that you (the reader/narrator/what have you) are finally able to understand what you truly want in life, or maybe even you are remembering an old dream that you had and now you wish to finally accomplish it. 

Lines 9-12

This is the stanza where I am stuck on. I feel a little...detached.The rhyme and the flow does not feel like the same poem. And with that abrupt and fast-paced rhyme makes the poem end abruptly. My suggestion would be to switch the 2nd and 3rd stanza if you are interested. 


Overall I absolutely enjoyed this piece! I thought it was very sweet and definitely relatable for me. I enjoyed it and I know many other people will too! My review is simply opinion and of course not meant to insult your piece! I at least hope my review was food for thought :)


Please don't hesitate to submit more material to #Criticarium
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SLant22 Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2013  Student General Artist
Thanks. It helped me a lot. :)
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CelestialMemories Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Anytime C: Don't hesitate to submit more work to the group and if you want you can even request me personally!
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BlackRavenKuria Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I really feel for this poem. I never truly felt more like living and happier then when I realized my dream and started going down that path. I feel more like myself than I have ever been before.

This is very well written and very well put. Great poem.
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SLant22 Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you for the compliment. :)

I am very happy~
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BlackRavenKuria Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Your welcome.

I am so glad. :)
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That1PersonUForgot Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Nicely written! I love it :)
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